100wc week#46

Link to prompt: 100wc

Matilda took a deep breath and walked through the door. The floorboards creaked beneath her feet as her weight shifted between her feet. She shuffled through the lit room, eyeing every corner. In the corner of her eye, she saw something move. Matilda whipped her head around quickly, only to find nothing in her presence. She found herself staring into a wall. Then, the lights flickered and Matilda was left in darkness for a fraction of a second. Her heart was beating a million miles per hour.
Then suddenly it went dark.

2 Comments


  1. Phoebe,
    this is another wonderful example of descriptive writing. The way you use thoughtfully selected words and actions to describe the setting and the characters evoke a clear sense of fear and foreboding. The deep breath, the floor creaking, the heart beating, the flash in the corner of the eye- these are such classic symbols of fear and you’ve used them wonderfully to create your mood here.
    Great work,
    Ant

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  2. WOW! Brilliant ending. But I still think that all of it was great

    Well done!

    FINN

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